2018 December 13: Removed any mention at all of the eight-virtue model by Zerik in chapter 9. I only put it in there in the first place because I wanted to make it clear that Mitilda and Leuis knew about that, but I decided it's not necessary.

2018 October 25: Edited the scene where Katherine teaches the new recruits about neon, so that when Jaydin asks what would happen if someone left an orb of it unattended, she says it fizzles out eventually, instead of leaving it a mystery to the reader for the rest of the book.

2018 October 23: Some word choice/sentence flow edits to chapter 11, and also in the scene where Jaydin escapes the hideout after killing a Voren with the ceiling, changed the order of events slightly so that Yildirim blows the hole in the wall to distract the Voren before Jaydin flies past them. It's a lot more believable that way.

2018 October 18: Changed Mitilda's last line in chapter 2 from "You and Jaydin will be braver someday" (which is too condescending considering what just happened) to "Give yourself some credit. You were a good person, and I knew it.".

2018 October 3: Some editing for conciseness in the first scene of chapter 2, and also so that Mitilda doesn't say she'll owe Jaydin a favor if the guards punish him.

2018 September 8: Holy shit! I finished it! I'd still like to do some editing before I really move on, but this is a huge milstone for me.

2018 August 29: Changed Tajiv's name to Taliv.

2018 August 27: Adjusted the dialogue where Zerik tells Mitilda and Leuis about the virtue fuels for magic so it doesn't sound quite so much like I'm dogmatically forcing my virtue model on the reader.

2018 August 22: A lot of minor editing and fixed a plothole I realized: in the chapter 10 argument, Mitilda raised a point that Yildirim was close to dying of age, but that doesn't work because they learned about life extension magic from Zerik.

2018 August 9: Added a line of dialogue in chapter 10 where Zerik tells the heroes that if they had've just ditched their consciences they wouldn't have had to die, and removed breaking of the fourth wall in chapter 5.

2018 August 8: Added some dialogue in chapter 6 where Katherine explicitly mentions the use of destruction magic to cut through things, and - booyah - added Chapter 10.

2018 August 3: Edited chapter 4 so that Mitilda and Gabriel and Nayomi don't keep their plan secret from their parents until they get back.

2018 July 24: Changed the second question Jaydin asks the guard in chapter 2 from whether he suspects the king is lying (which doesn't make a lot of sense because the guard would probably just lie) to whether they ever showed him magic. Also adjusted the scenes that reference it.

2018 July 23: Edited chapter 3.

2018 July 19: A lot of editing in the first two chapters. I'm also starting work on a major formatting improvement.

2018 June 29: Added a line in chapter 9, Jaydin's story #3 where David explains that if you travel far past the pillars, you run into dangerous storms.

2018 June 21: Reduced the time it takes for Katherine to make it to the seventh pillar in chapter 7.

2018 June 18: Added chapter 9, removed the power of blocking from the magic system, made it more clear that the Sentinels' hideout is in the center pillar, added some dialogue in Chapter 6 where Yildirim explains where the rivers on the 7th pillar come from, and a couple of minor edits to word choice & such.

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